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Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people say that it is too late to do something while others think that actions can be taken to improve the situation. Discuss both sides of the view and give your opinion.

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Vividly, dangerous activities on flora and fauna have become an omnipresent rage which has led us at vulnerable zone. By the thinking of some people,
this
 trend should be changed in order to protect the nature's beauty.
Nonetheless
, others are totally against with
this
 notion. Both viable prospectives will be discussed in my
next
 crumb of writing as follows: At the outset, many kinds of plants and animals have disappeared from the world which can never be resolved again. As per
survey
Suggestion
the survey
a survey
 of WHO, in 2013, several types of animals have disappeared from the earth due to deforestation. So,
this
 survey shows that human activities have vulnerable effects on flora and fauna ubiquitously. Paradoxically, some measurements should be done by not only
government
 but
also
 human beings in order to save the nature.
Firstly
, deforestation should be stopped by
government
 profoundly. By which, many animals will already be safe.
Moreover
, some campaigns and seminars should
also
 be launched by the authority. By dint of it, people will be
awared
(sometimes followed by 'of') having or showing knowledge or understanding or realization or perception
aware
 about the importance of flora and fauna and they will try to protect them. Some strict laws can be made.
For example
, in
USA
Suggestion
the USA
, if anyone
cut
Suggestion
cuts
 the tree,
then
 he have to give the biggest fine to their
government
. By above mentioned changes, animals and plants can be protected wisely. By analysing above mentioned views, I conclude that several things can be done by
government
 as well as individuals to stop human activities which has damaging impacts on plants wisely.
Submitted by Princepreet Singh on

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