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Computers are being used more and more in education and some people believe there will soon be no role for the teacher in education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt, without computer life is in vain. As,
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education system
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the education system
 has changed due to excessive use of computers. Some people believe that decrease the importance of teachers in
education
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 by the passing time. I disagree with
statement
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the statement
 because teachers our guides and nobody can replace them in
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education system
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the education system
. It is an undeniable, the computers are being used as a major
media
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medium
 of communication in
education
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. There is huge knowledgeable data is available to
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satisfy
 the students.
For example
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, students take online classes and coaching on
internet
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the internet
, which can ease them from assignments and project work. In
this
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 way, students are curious to grab knowledge from
internet
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the internet
.
However
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, pupils have need
to
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for
of
 specific guidance and assistance, which can make them better. As we know, teachers are the one who understand the student’s capability and teach them
accordingly
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 in a different way with satisfaction.
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, teachers play an eminent role in every student’s life. It means, children are learning in groups which helps them to improve their social skills,
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 they interact with others students which helps to make good friends.
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, students learn from teachers rather than computer, it is worthy because
teacher
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the teacher
solve
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solves
 the student’s problem by repeating explanation and provide them extra lectures. In conclusion, the role of teacher in
education
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 is more important rather than
computer
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a computer
the computer
computers
 because students learn and improve many aspects
such
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 as social skills and better guidance, which cannot improve by online teaching.

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