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Some people think that uniform at school is unnecessary and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #uniform #school
In my perspective,
schools
Suggestion
school
school's
uniform
 should not be banned. It is necessary that children are wearing
uniform
 in schools. There are some pros of having
uniform
 in schools.
Firstly
, uniforms
should maintained
Suggestion
should maintain
 the discipline as well as
equality
 in every student in the
school
.
In other words
, discipline and
equality
 are important in schools, as they feel like union.
For example
, if the students are wearing casual and expensive cloths in schools, it’s not
shows
Suggestion
showing
 the
equality
 in children, it shows the differences between rich and poor.
Hence
, some students get embarrassed because their parents do not afford the branded or expensive cloths as belongs to middle class families.
Moreover
,
uniform
 create an identity of a particular
school
 in the community. It is an important part
for
Suggestion
of
 being
school
Suggestion
schooled
 student like a
pride
a woman who has recently been married
bride
, and it is easy to get ready in
school
uniform
.
For instance
, every
school
 has own
uniform
, it creates
a
Suggestion
an
 identity of student and
school
also
. In local area, children are identified
with
Suggestion
by
 their uniforms that where
school
 they have studied. Overall, uniforms must be important in every
school
 because of their advantages
such
 as, children learn discipline, maintain
equality
 and creates the identity of
school
Suggestion
the school
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • uniform
  • unnecessary
  • banned
  • promotes
  • equality
  • peer pressure
  • fosters
  • sense of belonging
  • pride
  • prepares
  • future
  • maintain
  • discipline
  • order
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