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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution #measures
Technology has greatly provided us with
immense comfort level
Suggestion
an immense comfort level
the immense comfort level
 when it comes to
transport
. People these days easily commute in cars, buses, trains and airplanes.
Majority
Suggestion
The majority
 of them use personal cars as it’s a safe and secure means of
transport
 with privacy.
However
, the increase of vehicles is contributing to increased traffic on roads and the toxic gases released in
air
Suggestion
the air
 due to jets are causing a rise in air pollution which is a cause of major concern. It is thought by some that traffic and pollution problem can be controlled by raising the price of petrol. As the price will be increased, people will not go out frequently and that will limit the number of cars being used.
Moreover
, people will be encouraged to use the public
transport
.
On the other hand
, increasing price will add another added expense for those people who live in cities where public
transport
 is limited, as they will have no choice but to use their own cars. In my opinion, it is government’s responsibility to control the growing traffic and pollution problems by making sure there are enough public
transport
 facilities available and the fares are reasonable for people commuting daily. Introduce a law that restricts the numbers of vehicles on roads during peak hours and weekends. For commuting in
neighborhood
Suggestion
the neighbourhood
neighbourhood
a neighbourhood
, encourage people to walk or ride in their cycles.
Moreover
, the risk of accidents on roads will be reduced
aswell
Suggestion
as well
. In conclusion, citizens should
also
 take part in tackling with increasing road congestion by following alternative ways the government has provided with. By being good members of society these issues can be combated.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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