In the past, many people had skills such as making their own clothes and doing repairs to things in the house. In many countries, nowadays, skills like these are disappearing. Why do you think this change is happening? How far is this situation true in your country?

In the olden days,
majority
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the majority
of individuals were
multitalented
but as
time
passed the idea of expertise in different fields became an old fashioned one. Nowadays, people pay attention
to establish
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to establishing
a single career and are less inclined towards being a polymath.
To begin
with, in the past, local people had
huge amount
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a huge amount
of
time
when compared with the times we live in today.
Thus
, they had plenty of
time
on their hands to master a new skill.
However
, at present, life in urban cities is fast-paced.
Therefore
, they don’t want to indulge in learning DIY (Do it yourself) skills.
Secondly
, the major factor for the decrease in the trend
is somewhat contributed
Suggestion
has somewhat contributed
is somewhat contributing
somewhat contributes
to the fact, that it was quite difficult to find manual
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
. Currently, professional and inexpensive
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
is easily found.
Additionally
, it
also
requires a lot of effort, energy and
time
to learn a new ability. In spite of, spending
time
to efficiently increase the existing skill, individual would like to spend some quality
time
with their families. To put it eloquently, in
early days
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the early days
, females used to sew their own clothes. But
this
positive trend began to sharply reduce when branded clothes arose in the markets and shopping malls.
As a result
, people started buying from markets as it was affordable and was not a hassle for millennial.
Lastly
, in my country, Pakistan, there is a gradual
decline but
Accept comma addition
decline, but
a handful of people still possess these skills.
For instance
, my grandparents knew to plough, stitch their clothes and even knew plumbing.
In contrast
, I only know a little about plumbing.
Hence
, these skills are vanishing as me and my parents had not intended to learn them. To conclude, human beings possessed
plethora
Suggestion
a plethora
of traditional skills.
In addition
, people don’t get much
time
or they want to establish a healthier lifestyle with a single career.
However
, in my opinion, we should learn multiple/ different/ more skills so that we are not dependent on others.
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