Children nowadays watch significantly more television than in the past,which reduces their activity levels accordingly.why is this the case? What measures can you suggest to encourage higher levels of activity among children?

In
this
day
and age pupils are watching regular
tv
shows without doing other work.
They
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Their
all children are
watch
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watching
tv
hole
day
without eating and doing some other activities.
watching
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Watching
tv
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TV
is not good for children physical and
mentally
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mental
health.
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refers to the speaker or writer
I
will discuss some of causes of watching
tv
and how to overcome in following paragraphs. The
first
and foremost reason is that watching
tv
hole
day
take bad effect on
children eyes
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the child's eyes
child's eyes
children's eyes
because
tv screen
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the tv screen
produced ultra
voilent
acting with or marked by or resulting from great force or energy or emotional intensity
violent
rays which is very bad for eye sight. Children are watching
tv
daily 5 to 8 hours daily its
bad
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worst
for child health and physical
developmental
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development
. They not do proper their study and waste their important
time
on watching cartons and other serial on
tv
.
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.
Nowadays everyone has a
tv
in their
home but
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home, but
in the
past there
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past, there
are not
tv
and other gadgets in the home so that by children spend their
time
on proper thing in
past
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the past
.
in
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In
traditional
time
most of
people
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the people
are not educated so they
no
be cognizant or aware of a fact or a specific piece of information; possess knowledge or information about
know
about
this things
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these things
this thing
.
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.
The lots of solutions are helpful
to overcome of
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to overcome this
this
problem and encourage to other activities. Children should make their
hole
daily routine chat with all activities and do
regular
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regularly
then
they
mantain
keep in a certain state, position, or activity; e.g., "keep clean"
maintain
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maintained
proper
time
.
Accept space
.
children
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Children
are read real story books and other traditional and
adventures
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adventure
book
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book, then
then
they can gain their knowledge and easily connect with
teir
of them or themselves
their
rits
an established ceremony prescribed by a religion
rites
roots
and rituals. Children do spend
teir
of them or themselves
their
there
hectic
time
on sports because
this
feld
a piece of land cleared of trees and usually enclosed
field
feed
felt
make
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makes
men strong and
physical
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physically
fit. With the
asist
give help or assistance; be of service
assist
exist
asset
of
spots
an active diversion requiring physical exertion and competition
sports
feld
a piece of land cleared of trees and usually enclosed
field
filled
feed
they can show their
hiden
not accessible to view
hidden
telent
natural abilities or qualities
talent
talents
with others and achieve a good platform. To conclude, watching
tv
hole
day
not good for child health it creates lots of
helth
a form of energy that is transferred by a difference in temperature
heat
relatied
being connected either logically or causally or by shared characteristics
related
issues in children and make child introvert as well as stubborn. If children see
tv
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the tv hole day
hole
day
they lose their academic scores and worry about their carrier
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  • digital platforms
  • on-demand streaming services
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  • marketing
  • urban environments
  • structured screen time
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