Children nowadays watch significantly more television than in the past,which reduces their activity levels accordingly.why is this the case? What measures can you suggest to encourage higher levels of activity among children?

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and age pupils are watching regular

shows without doing other work.

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all children are

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watching

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day

without eating and doing some other activities.

watching

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Watching

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is not good for children physical and

mentally

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mental

health.

refers to the speaker or writer

will discuss some of causes of watching

and how to overcome in following paragraphs. The

first

and foremost reason is that watching

hole

day

take bad effect on

children eyes

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the child's eyes

child's eyes

children's eyes

because

tv screen

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the tv screen

produced ultra

voilent

acting with or marked by or resulting from great force or energy or emotional intensity

violent

rays which is very bad for eye sight. Children are watching

daily 5 to 8 hours daily its

bad

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worst

for child health and physical

developmental

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development

. They not do proper their study and waste their important

time

on watching cartons and other serial on

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Nowadays everyone has a

in their

home but

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home, but

in the

past there

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past, there

are not

and other gadgets in the home so that by children spend their

time

on proper thing in

past

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the past

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traditional

time

most of

people

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the people

are not educated so they

be cognizant or aware of a fact or a specific piece of information; possess knowledge or information about

know

about

this things

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these things

this thing

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The lots of solutions are helpful

to overcome of

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to overcome this

this

problem and encourage to other activities. Children should make their

hole

daily routine chat with all activities and do

regular

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regularly

then

they

mantain

keep in a certain state, position, or activity; e.g., "keep clean"

maintain

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maintained

proper

time

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children

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Children

are read real story books and other traditional and

adventures

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adventure

book

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book, then

then

they can gain their knowledge and easily connect with

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of them or themselves

their

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an established ceremony prescribed by a religion

rites

roots

and rituals. Children do spend

teir

of them or themselves

their

there

hectic

time

on sports because

this

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a piece of land cleared of trees and usually enclosed

field

feed

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make

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makes

men strong and

physical

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physically

fit. With the

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give help or assistance; be of service

assist

exist

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spots

an active diversion requiring physical exertion and competition

sports

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a piece of land cleared of trees and usually enclosed

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filled

feed

they can show their

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not accessible to view

hidden

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natural abilities or qualities

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talents

with others and achieve a good platform. To conclude, watching

hole

day

not good for child health it creates lots of

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a form of energy that is transferred by a difference in temperature

heat

relatied

being connected either logically or causally or by shared characteristics

issues in children and make child introvert as well as stubborn. If children see

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the tv hole day

hole

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they lose their academic scores and worry about their carrier

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