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Nowadays more people are choosing to live with friends or alone rather than with their families. This trend is likely to have a negative impact on communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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 todays era,
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the majority
a majority
 of people want to inhabit with their peers, or they prefer to choose solitary life
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 of living with their parents. In my view,
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 vogue gives both negative and positive effects within the society which will be elaborated in
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 paragraphs. Family values are vanishing day by day as adolescents are inclined toward living apart from the
family which
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family, which
 is a negative impact on our society and communities.Lives of elderly people are dependent on
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the young ones
 and in
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a later age
, they require the help and care
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 their children. Nowadays, parents are feeling isolated which can result into depression, cardiac attack and some other serious illness. Punjab, a state of India is an epitome in
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 context as 75% young population is living in Canada, USA and UK without their parents and families.
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it is important to feel independent which is a crucial factor to become a successful person. People, who are living alone or
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with friends, never
 carry any family or social pressure to do excel in their lives which increases the probability of their victory in their field.
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 freedom has brought some invention or innovative ideas which
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have changed
 the speed of our development. There are so many business tycoons who used to live in solitude has done extraordinary work for the betterment of the society. To recapitulate, in my opinion the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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, we have to be cautious about our parents so that they do not feel isolated in the community.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Erosion
  • Communal cohesion
  • Geographical dispersion
  • Interpersonal relationships
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Real estate dynamics
  • Psychological well-being
  • Technological facilitation
  • Independence
  • Traditional vs modern lifestyles
  • Intergenerational relationships
  • Virtual communities
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