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Some people think the government should focus on improving the economy of the country. Other people think the government should focus on social services such as health and education programs. Which statement do you agree with? Explain and provide examples to support your opinion.

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It’s believed that government focus should be on economy improvement, whereas others think social services
such
 as health and education systems are more important to be focused on. I agree to economical view and I will talk about my reasons.
Firstly
, nowadays, a dynamic economic system is a significant element in developed countries that balances between people’s income and their expenses.
Moreover
,
Accept space
,
people are able to fulfil their basic needs which is food, clothing and a place to live when economical systems are planned and progressed well.
In addition
, in a healthy economic system, folks can have saving for doing whatever they deserve, it can be travelling, buy a house or getting married and wedding party. So
as a result
, economic play an important role in nation lives.
Secondly
, providing services for all nations of the country is an essential.
In other words
, life welfares should not be limited to a specific group of people
For example
, rich and middle class while labours suffering.
Also
, there should not be any huge gap between people they be categorised by their wealth. In conclusion,
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