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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent u agree or disagree?

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In
this
 contemporary world, it is undoubtedly true that everyone wishes to do something good for the society to improve the living standards for all. Some people concur that unpaid social service is to be made mandatory aspect of high school programs.
However
, I partially agree with
this
 statement as I believe that it should be
one
's own desire to work
for
Suggestion
in
 the
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
.
One
 of the most conspicuous aspects of working compulsorily for the
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
 welfare is that it helps people realise their prime duty towards the betterment of society. By doing
this
, not only can
one
 be a good citizen, but
one
 can
also
 inspire others to be the same.
Besides
, it inculcates the value of
volunteerism
 among many. Testified from the fact, a myriad of schools have started working on the "Swacch Bharat Abhiyaan", a scheme launched by the Prime Minister in India, to make our surroundings neat and clean. Needless to say, all these merits stand students in good stead when it comes to doing something incredible for their nation.
On the other hand
, by working compulsorily for community services, students can lack time
to provide
Suggestion
provide
 for studies. With
this
, they sometimes end up scoring low grades in academics. Only when students follow mandatory unpaid services, will they loosen up interest in studies. According to statistics, youngsters who are into multiple tasks
such
 as studies, NGO's, charities, become unable to give their focus and concentration towards academics. Undoubtedly, these aspects can make students' studies suffer. From the views outlined above, it can be concluded that
although
 working voluntarily for
one
's community make
one
 a responsible citizen, but at the same time making it a mandatory part of higher studies will definitely affect studies and grades, as it should be
one
's self desire to work for the community rather than a compulsion.
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