Solving environmental problems should be the responsibility of an international organizational rather than each national government. Do you agree or disagree?

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"The forest is being destroyed as many as 36 football fields per minute. 58,000 species of animals are disappearing each year, and 24 billion tons of fertile land

is lost

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are lost

every year. The number of hungry people has increased to 815 million," Katharine Hartmann says, referring to environmental issues in her book, "Covering Environmentalism." As

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, the environment is becoming polluted day by day, and the need to address it is growing. Many people believe that these environmental problems should be dealt internationally rather than domestically. I agree with

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view.

First

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, environmental problems can affect various parts of the world. Usually environmental pollution affects several countries and the cause of environmental problems is not in one country, but in many countries.

For example

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, the cause of fine dust is not only in

Korea but

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Korea, but

also

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in China and Japan.

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November 2019, the National Institute of Environmental Research announced that about half of Korea's

ultrafine

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dust was caused by domestic influence and 32 percent were from China. As

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, environmental issues cannot be limited to the responsibility of either country. Even if Korea tries to reduce fine dust,

this

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environmental problem will not be solved without China's cooperation. International efforts are needed to efficiently solve environmental problems.

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, countries can share

solutions environmental problems

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solutions to environmental problems

quickly. Dealing environmental issues in a global scale helps to get more ideas and solutions to overcome problems. In fact, European

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the United States (especially the northern states during the American Civil War)

Union

has applied that in 2017 when they

stated

take the first step or steps in carrying out an action

started

a project to decrease the accumulated

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litter

in the ocean. And they got more accurate solutions to overcome these problems like imposing some laws that restrict the usage of plastic tools for delivering foods in restaurants in the countries of the union. Like

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, discussing

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kind of issues on a global level helps to share science and technologies to handle environmental problems. Some people argue that dealing with environmental problems internationally takes a long time due to disputes.

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, these opinions overlook the fact that it is more effective to solve environmental problems than the time it takes to resolve them. Africa has made international efforts to prevent

desertification

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since 2007. Ten years have passed, and in 2017, 20 African countries started a project called

Green Great

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Green, Great

Wall of Africa to prevent

desertification

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This

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project restored 50 million hectares of

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. If it hadn't been discussed internationally just because it takes a long time, none of these results would have been achieved. In conclusion, I approved

dealing environmental

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dealing, environmental

problems internationally. Wendell Berry once stated that "Earth is something in common with all of us.". Like

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quote, the environment belongs to all of us, it has no borders

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Environmental problems of one country can threaten the entire human race. Solving environmental problems internationally is essential now that environmental problems are becoming more serious.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

467 words

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