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Nowadays families are not as close as they used to be.

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Family is one of
most important parts
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the most important parts
 of our life, but nowadays families are not as close as we used to be. Because we have too many choices to spend
time
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 on our weekend, it caused we can't spend
time
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 together with family members. For
this
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 problem, let me share some idea and solution in
this
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 essay.
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, the highly developed technology has changed in our lives. We used to chat each other in person, but we use social application to
communicate family members
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communicate with family members
 at present.
Therefore
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, we lose the close relationship during we get the convenient live.
Second
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, we
are keep
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are keeping
keep
have kept
 the secret by ourselves as we grow older. Because we want to be
a
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an
 independent
people
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person
, so we rarely share the things to sisters and brothers or parents. When family members cannot get the information
of
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about
on
 you, maybe you will have a distance with them in the long run. Of course we don't want to meet
this
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 situation, but we don't how to deal with it. In the conclusion, I want to provide some solutions for you. Whatever you are a smartphone addict or you are
in
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on
 the rebellious stage. To set your
time
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 for using your social application,
time
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 is up, you have to call the phone to chat or meet each other face by face. And
then
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 we can invite family members having dinner together on
weekend
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the weekend
weekends
, sharing our life stories during the family
time
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. We need to change our
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 just a little bit and
then
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 we can get closer
with
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to
 others as like as before.
Submitted by Claire Lin on

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