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A country becomes more interesting and develops more quickly when its population includes a mixture of nationalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The world is one, with no barriers between different cultures, races and nationalities. A
country
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 develops more quickly with
combined efforts
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the combined efforts
 of all its citizens, whether they are original inhabitants or migrants, regardless of their origin and a mix of nationalities adds the right flavour in making a
country
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 more interesting. I completely agree with
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. A
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’s culture is essentially a reflection of the people residing in it. In the overall development of the
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, the cross-learning that takes place between different races is important. The exchange of cultural ideas adds value to the nation and makes it more interesting. Whether it was the Persians who carried the spices to India centuries ago or the current line-up of Indian restaurants across the UK, is a perfect example of how a mixture of nationalities makes the place more interesting. In
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 era of globalization, where we talk about a world economy and an open society, the development of the
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 is
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 affected positively with the help of people from other nationalities. The perfect example of
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 is, Indians residing in the USA and working in
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the fields
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. The contribution of these people to the economy of the
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 they live in has helped in the overall development of the
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. To conclude, I believe, for any society to reach its full potential, a mix of culture and cross-learning is essential. For any
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 to develop and sustain growth, the expertise of people matters, regardless of their nationalities.
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