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The government should take responsibility for their actions to the environment. To what extent do you agree?

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It is always a debatable question that whether it is
government resoponsibility
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a government responsibility
government responsibility
government responsibilities
 to take care of the
Envirnoment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
 or individual as well. According to my point of view, it is the duty of both to take care of the
Envirnoment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
. In
essay
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the essay
an essay
 I will give some reasons, according to my point of view.
First
 of all, our world is suffering from many burning issues and environmental problems which are caused by many items in which plastic products are on the top of the list. To handle these situations the individuals must have to show their intelligence by avoiding those products which are made from plastic. Because plastic takes two million years to complete degrading. Plastic covers the soil layer and reduces water supply and nutrient supply to
soil
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the soil
 and so lands become barren. People should
also
 need to use 3R process "Reduce, Reuse and Recyle "
t
in the direction of
to
 maintain the fertility of soil.
Moreover people
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Moreover, people
 should plant trees to make
envirnoment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
 clean. Every person should at least plant one tree for his safe and clean future. The
Government
 should
also
 need to focus on the cleaning of the
envirnoment
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Environment
Envirnoment
.
Government
 should apply strict rules against cutting trees and making the
envirnoment
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environment
environmentally
environmental
 harmful.
Government
 should take serious actions against those who found guilty
in
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of
 these crimes. The
government
 should start new tree planting projects in every city. The
government
 needs to start a campaign to aware people about the consequences or harm of the
envirnomental
of or relating to the external conditions or surroundings
environmental
 problems. In conclusion, I think it is not only the
government
"s duty to take care of the
envirnoment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
,
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,
 but it is
also
 an individual's duty to take serious proactive measures to clean environment.
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