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Some people think that new technology always improves the lives of workers. Other people believe that it results in disadvantages for workers. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Technology
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 comes with both; benefits and curses,
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, it is debatable whether its positive impact outweigh the negative in the workers' lives or not. Various means of
technology
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 include the usage of computers, modern machines with programmable controllers, robots etc. Indeed, modern methods to conduct an activity has replaced the workers with machines. A carpenter takes an hour to cut a piece of wood, but a
machine
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 can do
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 task in a minute. A few decades ago, accountants used to manage the balance sheets of conglomerates, but presently a single accountant can manage
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 tasks by using softwares.
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 technological progress has replaced some of the blue-collared workers
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, they feel that their job security is endangered. In comparison to
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,
technology
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 comes with a price. Not every company can afford the liberty to substitute cheap labour with any form of
technology
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. The ultimate benefit that a manual worker brings to an organization is that, various tasks can be conducted by
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 worker, whereas a
machine
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 has certain limitations. Modern
technology
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 can do a repetitive task quite
productively
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productive
, but in order to carry out creative tasks, manual labour is the utilized.
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, the
cost
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 of hiring a worker is known to a company. One of the many disadvantages of owning a modern
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 is its additional
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.
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, the fixed
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 of a
machine
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 coupled with a variable factor adds to the value of the product that a company is producing which means that the product
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 increased,
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 whenever
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 machines are procured, its careful calculations draw the conclusion that workers are better than
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technology
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. In conclusion, I totally believe that no matter how much technological advancements are introduced, workers will always be the primary source of earning for any organization.
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, there are no disadvantages to the workers.

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