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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager.

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Dear Mr Smith, I am writing to you to outline certain areas where we can improve the reception in our company. Allow me to elaborate. You see, the majority of our visitors complained about the limited number of seats available, and most of our
customers
 had to stand while they were waiting for their turn. Another issue is the long waiting time to
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 their requests.
Customers
 reported that their average waiting time is half an hour. As you know, the reception is the primary location for our visitors and it affects their
first
 impression of our company.
Also
,
customers
 share their ideas and thoughts about our company with others while waiting, so it is extremely important to ensure their comfort to promote positive talks about us. I would like to suggest that we should add more seats to make our clients feel more comfortable. I
also
 propose that we can implement a booking system online and over the phone. By doing so, we can anticipate the number of
customers
 at a certain point.
This
 method will improve the service at the reception area, as visitors will be well seated and their transactions will be quicker. Yours sincerely, Bishoy Yousef
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional advancement
  • cross-cultural collaboration
  • headquarters/ head office
  • global perspective
  • remote work
  • temporary assignment
  • team dynamics
  • networking opportunities
  • cultural immersion
  • succession planning
  • collaborative tools
  • time zone coordination
  • corporate hierarchy
  • relocation logistics
  • work-life balance
  • multinational environment
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