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Most people do not care enough about environmental issues. To what extent of do you agree or disagree?

#people #care
Global warming is on
rise
Suggestion
the rise
 due to man-made errors. The repercussions on the environment due to human activities are ignored in many demographic parts of the society.
This
 essay will discuss, how these pressing issues are least exposed despite the damage being happened. Some people claim, that in day-to-day busy life, taking care of themselves is becoming a daunting task. On top of
this
, protecting
nature
 and its well-being is argued as a
herculean
Suggestion
Herculean
 task. Most of the researchers are focussed
in
Suggestion
on
 creating new inventions which will make human lives more advanced rather than its detrimental effects to our
nature
.
Therefore
, it's a crucial time to rethink and reset our lifestyles which indirectly lessens
burden
Suggestion
the burden
 on mother earth. Combustion of fossil fuels
such
 as carbon dioxide,
nonhydrocarbons
 etc., is a major threat to the
nature
. Most of the people are unaware of these concepts in spite of having their contribution.
For example
, according to
recent survey
Suggestion
a recent survey
recent surveys
, globally 60 % of
population
Suggestion
the population
 prefer to travel in their own vehicle which are petroleum driven. Around 40 % of people choose to travel by air to go for vacations or business trips. In a nutshell, any automobile driven by petroleum or diesel contributes to
greenhouse effect
Suggestion
the greenhouse effect
, which poses a greater risk to the earth and its elements. Another risk is urbanization, industrialization and cutting down the forests.
This
 is reinforced by over-cultivation and over-grazing in order to combat food scarcity.
For instance
, new cities and geographic dimensions are being in existence by encroaching the forest space to
accomodate
be agreeable or acceptable to
accommodate
 people in over-populated areas.
Thus
, leading to air, water and sound pollution. All these activities are depleting the ozone layer
further
 enhancing the risks. To sum-up, environmental threats are less spoken mainly due to lack of awareness and advances in technology. Mankind should start focussing on preventions and avoid imminent risks to the
nature
.
Submitted by Pooja Sindhuri Kantepalli on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prioritize
  • immediate needs
  • connect with
  • distant
  • abstract
  • economic considerations
  • growing awareness
  • active participation
  • initiatives
  • movements
  • impacts
  • well-being
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