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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many countries, primarily the developed ones, provide free
health
 services to its public. Due to the limited resources, it is pervasive that these services are fundamental and do not include any expensive and latest technological medical services. It is ultimately agreed that not all medical services can be provided in these services, especially the complicated and pricy
health
 care services.
This
 will be proven by analysing how difficult it is for the governments to support the essential free
health
 services and how expensive medical treatments are not required frequently by the masses. On the one hand, every government has a limited budget for the free
health
 services provided in the
country
. As an example, annually, Canada spends about 11.6% of its GDP on
health
 spending. Free
health
 service is a high burden for any
country
, and many countries spend as little as 1.18% of its GBP on free
health
 services,
thus
 not all countries can provide the high quality of medical services to its citizens.
On the other hand
, many medical technologies are not frequently used in hospitals.
This
 is very apparent when new technologies are imported in the hospitals as doctors have been treating patients prior to the import of these technologies and may continue to use the same treatment methods for a long time. In most cases, new technology equipment would not be frequently used by the doctors as they rely more on their old methods. After analysing
this
, it is clear that newly imported technologies would not be efficiently used in hospitals. Following the analysation of a government's ability to fund the free
health
 care services and how efficient the newly developed technologies can be used, it is clear that not every
country
 can provide new technological services with free
health
 service as these services might not be used by many of the citizens;
however
Suggestion
However
, it will put a
further
 financial burden on the
country
's budget.
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