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The impact of vaccinations on the incidence of whooping cough, a childhood illness, between 1940 and 1990 in Britain has changed a lot. Do you agree with this statement?

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The graph illustrates the changing
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of
 cases of
wooping
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whooping
cough
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 a childhood illness in Britain from 1940 to 2010 and how the
vaccine
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 impact to the cases of
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disease
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. Overall, it can be seen that there was a link between the
percentage
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 of people using
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vaccine
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the vaccine
 and the
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 of whooping
cough
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 cases
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, in 1940, there was about 50000 when
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disease
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 just appeared in Britain. The
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 of cases of whooping
cough
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 increased dramatically and reach a peak
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of
 nearly 180000 cases in the later
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.
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,
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number
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 of cases
felt
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will fall
fell
 back in some
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year
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, it increased to over 16 thousand cases in 1950 and fluctuated in the period of 1950s The
vaccine
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 had been discovered in the nearly
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 1960 and the patients of
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disease
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 decreased significantly and hit the bottom in 1973. In 1980, there was a specific
percentage
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 of people who used
vaccine
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 just got 30 percent so that
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number
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 of cases in 1980s suddenly increased again and reached 60000 cases. After that, the
percentage
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 of
vaccine
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 uptake went up and similar to that the patients of
wooping
shout, as if with joy or enthusiasm
whooping
cough
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 increased. In 2010 there was almost nobody had
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disease
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 because there was almost nobody had
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disease
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 because the
vaccine
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 uptake got 94
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 at the same
year
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.
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