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Nowadays, pollution and waste levels are increasing rapidly. How does this affect ordinary people? What steps can be taken to overcome this problem?

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World
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The world
 is getting filled up with impurities and unnecessary products,
day
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 by
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day which
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day, which
 in result, is affecting the various groups of people. There needs to be some decisions made in order to get rid of
this
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 problem.
To begin
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 with, present population's activities and lifestyle are the most responsible factors of
current situation
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the current situation
 of the globe.
Outcome
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The outcome
 of
this
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 daily
life
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live
 action
are
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is
, that older people, patients with weak immune systems and many more are suffering with different kinds of physical and mental inabilities regularly.
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, humans are using so many kinds of vehicles and machineries in their daily basis, which releases the most powerful and harmful gases,
nevertheless
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 they are putting up any efforts in increasing greenery around their selves. To make our surrounding less contaminated, each and every person has to step forward and have to keep any eye on their limitless wishes for unnecessary products
such
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 as old-fashioned chimneys
for
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of
 the houses, electronics with
plethora
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a plethora
the plethora
 of adulteration.
Secondly
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, non-degradable garbage is the upper most dangerous circumstance for the lives on the earth. Millions of plastic products are being used by most of the countries
everyday
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every day
. According to Wikipedia, some 18 billion of plastic waste is flowing into the
oceans which
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oceans, which
 is equivalent give grocery bags sitting on every foot of coastline around the world.
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, thousands of water species are dying after consuming it and people who eat
sea food
edible fish (broadly including freshwater fish) or shellfish or roe etc
seafood
 are catching numerous diseases
day
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 by
day
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.
This
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 needs to be stopped right away, use of bags or other material, which is not easy to
dissolved
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dissolve
 with natural agents, are supposed to be banned immediately by the government. By summing it up, the present population of
this
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 planet and government are the only ones who can stop
this
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 world to be ruined before it is too late. Both will have to add their initiates,
public
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the public
 has to be careful and possessive about the
nature
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nature, moreover
moreover
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 the responsible authorities should make a lot of guidelines in order to keep the environment fresh, safe and green.
Submitted by Harvinder Singh Virk on

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