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Nowadays, people move from on country to another for work. Some people think children of these families suffer because of this, while others think it is helpful for them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, many people choose to move to another country in search of work. It is argued by some that it is disadvantageous for children of these families as they often have to adapt new environment, while others believe that
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 way of
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 is beneficial for a child’s growth. In my opinion, discovering new
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 with their parents is a great experience for those
children even
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children, even
 though it can cause some stress. One of the biggest benefits of moving abroad with families is that it gives children a great opportunity to develop a deeper understanding of different cultures and
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, they would be more
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open minded
 when they grow up.
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, children’s perspectives could be broadened in
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 process by picking up new languages and trying different foods.
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, a recent study conducted in Japan has shown that children who have moved abroad at a young age are generally more confident and resilient towards challenges and difficulties in their future lives.
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,
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 kind of experience can be a double sword because children often have to deal with tough problems
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 as language barrier, culture shock and the difficulty of making friends, which is too stressful for a child. Take kindergarten as an example, it is basically impossible for a new kid to fit into the new school in a short period of
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since
 they speak different languages and have different dietary habits.
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, those children’s parents may not have enough
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 to stay at home because they have to find jobs in order to support their families.
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, those children must feel isolated and depressed after spending too much
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 alone. In conclusion, moving abroad for a better
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 can have a positive impact on a child’s growth.
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, it can be incredibly hard when those families
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 moved to a new country. In my opinion, starting a new
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 can be advantageous for children as long as they have enough
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 to solve those problems.

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