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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices To what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #choices
It is believed that in our century human beings have too many choices. I disagree with
this
 statement because
life
 in 21th century is developing and due to
that there
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that, there
 are a lot of things and opinions which from people can choose. From our childhood we have stages where we have to decide how our future will look like. We
can not
can not
cannot
 choose our parents or country where we were born, but we are responsible for creating our personality and creating our own
life
 path. That road might be complicated and
hard but
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hard, but
 if people found what makes them happy and
fulfills
put in effect
fulfils
fulfilled
 their soul they will always know how to win and determine right thing. People should be pleased with
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
 to be able to find a way
for
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of
life
 they want because of
great number
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a great number
 of choices.
For instance
, in Serbia students can study and live in other countries.
Furthermore
, people from poor countries have less chances to live how they deserve and in
way
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the way
a way
ways
 they want to, so it is important that they have more choices.
For instance
, population from Africa and India with undeveloped education systems,
life
 quality and low standards are likely to work hard and find
way
Suggestion
a way
the way
 to the happiness. That could be family, job or moving to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 country. In conclusion, people
can not
can not
cannot
 be given too many choices, because everyday people found out about new things and new horizons are being opened. There are bad and good choices and humans should always prefer and pick one which lead to
good feeling
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good feelings
a good feeling
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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