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The tradition that the family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts?

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In past years, eating together was very important for families, which help them to have a good relation and make a good time together. But, nowadays, we have seen a change in
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 and the effects of mealtime. Recently, we experienced a kind of hectic
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 in the result of developing urban
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. By increasing expenditure, few of the family members have to work, so, they expend many hours out of home and eat lunch or dinner solitary.
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, children prefer to eat meals in front of television. In
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 case, we have seen unsightly distance in family members. Of course it has shown lack of household art for gathering kids to eat a meal with parents. In my observation,
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. To illustrate more, sometimes, people prefer to eat fast foods out of home. Of course, it can impact on their diet and lead society to unhealthy eating habit. Certainly, restaurants or fast foods, neither provide their food with fresh and nutrient materials as a home repast. We will witness the other impact on upbringing of children. When children get the habit to eating alone, it can be impressive on their
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 will be influential on their personality. In conclusion, we should try to solve
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, destroy the effects on our
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. The vogue that
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 family members for eating meal together is very important and we should respect that.
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