It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician

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Analytically speaking
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the topic regarding children's talent grabs our immediate attention because of its significant effect. Many of us believe that some children are
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gifted. That's why they are able to perform well in sports
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music
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and in other activities
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on the contrary
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some others suggest that children born with the same
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ability, but
they require special training and concentration of their guider and
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parents. In my perception the
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view is more convincing. What lies behind the notion that children are born with the same
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Provision of a well developed
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as proper coachings and concentration of their teachers is surely one explanation.According to psychologists every child has
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to perform well in any field
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There are many famous sportsmen and musicians from all over the world. They were not
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gifted they became just because of the coaching that provided to them and
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the impact of the
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in which they lived. The
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and foremost important thing for children is to provide them
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also encourage them
every step of life so that they perform well in every field.It is well said that practice makes
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perfect. If children are born with some extra
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skills, then
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they will not need to take classes and the
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will not play an important role in their lives. As we know that every child has different abilities and skills
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some children are
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gifted they have some extra
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to perform
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well, but
it does not mean that others are not able to do anything
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also sometimes taken
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instance some
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instance, some
children have naturally nice
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voices, then
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they do not struggle a lot to become a good singer because that voice is
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gifted to them but it does not mean that others cannot perform well. They need guidance and a good coach who teaches them how to perform well
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In the culmination of the above
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tend to agree that children can do everything
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whatever we teach only by giving special attention and proper
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Training is
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an important tool to polish their
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in order to make them a good player or musician.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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