It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician

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Analytically speaking

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the topic regarding children's talent grabs our immediate attention because of its significant effect. Many of us believe that some children are

god

gifted. That's why they are able to perform well in sports

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music

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and in other activities

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However

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on the contrary

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some others suggest that children born with the same

ability but

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ability, but

they require special training and concentration of their guider and

also

parents. In my perception the

second

view is more convincing. What lies behind the notion that children are born with the same

ability

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Provision of a well developed

environment

such

as proper coachings and concentration of their teachers is surely one explanation.According to psychologists every child has

ability

to perform well in any field

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There are many famous sportsmen and musicians from all over the world. They were not

god

gifted they became just because of the coaching that provided to them and

also

the impact of the

environment

in which they lived. The

first

and foremost important thing for children is to provide them

good

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better

skills and

also encourage them in

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also encourage them

every step of life so that they perform well in every field.It is well said that practice makes

man

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a man

perfect. If children are born with some extra

skills

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skills, then

then

they will not need to take classes and the

environment

will not play an important role in their lives. As we know that every child has different abilities and skills

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On the other hand

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some children are

also

god

gifted they have some extra

ability

to perform

well but

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well, but

it does not mean that others are not able to do anything

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Talent

also sometimes taken

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is also sometimes taken

by heredity

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For

instance some

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instance, some

children have naturally nice

voices

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voices, then

then

they do not struggle a lot to become a good singer because that voice is

god

gifted to them but it does not mean that others cannot perform well. They need guidance and a good coach who teaches them how to perform well

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In the culmination of the above

discussion I

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discussion, I

tend to agree that children can do everything

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whatever we teach only by giving special attention and proper

environment

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Training is

also

an important tool to polish their

ability

in order to make them a good player or musician.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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