In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centre or complex to do shoppong

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Giving preference to shopping complex over street

market

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can be seen

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as it

happen

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happens

commonly, nowadays. Choice of branded product lead to

collapse

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the collapse

local

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the local market

market

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, and

this

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trend has totally negative impact on

domestic economy

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the domestic economy

and

employment rate

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the employment rate

. The prevalence of skyscrapers malls

have

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has

devasting

making light of

devastating

repercussions for young generation.

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, every nation is confronting the problem of unemployment and in that case, if family business or new shops will be shut

down

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down, then

then

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this

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would cut off the large proportion of

sourse

the place where something begins, where it springs into being

source

sources

of income.

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, unemployed people who are unable to find place in

job

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the job market

market

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could indulge in drug abuse

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bank robberies, and other distinct crimes to survive.

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, abject poverty might spoil the future of their children because of their inability to pay for education.Economically, it is a wrong option of grocery

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garments, and other usable things from the shopping mall.

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, other highlighted areas that are being affected by

this

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phenomena are cultural loss and disappearance of locally

manofactured

produced in a large-scale industrial operation

manufactured

material.

Ethinic

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attire

are

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no longer available in the

market

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because no one is willing to purchase them.

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, ethnicity is losing his charm and western wears have been flourishing for years.

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, unavailability of

large range

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a large range

of local material need to be mentioned here, which include crochet, wooden coat, iron utensils, and mud pots. Almost all extinct things had countless health benefits whom

no body

a person of no influence

nobody

can enjoy now. In conclusion, shutting down of individual shops in

local

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the local market

market

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are imposing obstacles like job insecurity and raised criminal activities. Lost domestic good cannot be avoided.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centre or complex to do shoppong

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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

In many countries, truancy* is a serious problem for both parents and teachers. •What are the causes of truancy, and what may be the effects on the child and the wider community?

Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part In organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.