The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Revolution in Nuclear

Technology

has brought several benefits. Possession of Nuclear Weapons

have created

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has created

fear between

countries leaving

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countries, leaving

conflicts unresolved,

moreover

nuclear power is turned out to serve

energy need

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the energy need

an energy need

energy needs

economically and in

environmental friendly way

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an environmentally friendly way

environmentally friendly way

However

, drawbacks

connects a noun with the preceding word

nuclear

technology

can not be overseen which are hazardous disasters if it is misused. In my opinion, even though nuclear

technology

has brought plenty of

advantages but

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advantages, but

cons of its usage holds more

weightage

. On the one hand,

invention

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the invention

of nuclear

technology

has blessed mankind by providing affordable energy.

Consequently

, it helps to meet their power demand and foster the development of economy.

Additionally

, development of nuclear weapons has created threat between

first

world

countries from each other and forcing them to resolve their conflicts by debate.

As a result

, there is little of no worry about arising situations like

world war

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a world war

world wars

Hence

, it is palpable that nuclear energy has

capability

Suggestion

the capability

to flourish economy and make a

world

a better place to live. On the

another

not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied

other

hand, It is not wise to gloss over the perilous effects of nuclear disasters. Nowadays, terrorism is increasing at

alarming rate

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an alarming rate

alarming rates

and use of nuclear weapons by

such

anti

humanitarian

Suggestion

human

activity could be fatal.

Moreover

such

disasters could even occur in the process of generating nuclear power and testing nuclear weapons and

effect

the conscious subjective aspect of feeling or emotion

affect

society severally leading to deformities in many generations.

For example

historical attack

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a historical attack

the historical attack

on Japan in

World

war II by nuclear missile had its effects for several decades.

Therefore

, nuclear

technology

has several negative repercussions on society.

Finally

although

development of nuclear

technology

has brought several benefits

for

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mankind but

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mankind, but

can not

cannot

be accepted unless it becomes completely safe for mankind. It cannot be accepted as

beneficial

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a beneficial technology

technology

until there are some activists around the

world

who gravitate towards its use to create terror in the

world

. In conclusion, I believe from points above that

disadvantages

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disadvantage

arising from misuse of nuclear

technology

as well as

horrendous tragedy

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a horrendous tragedy

from nuclear disaster can overshadow all possible benefits.

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