The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Revolution in Nuclear
Technology
has brought several benefits. Possession of Nuclear Weapons
have created
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has created
fear between
countries leaving
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countries, leaving
conflicts unresolved,
moreover
nuclear power is turned out to serve
energy need
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the energy need
an energy need
energy needs
economically and in
environmental friendly way
Suggestion
an environmentally friendly way
environmentally friendly way
.
However
, drawbacks
f
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
nuclear
technology
can not be overseen which are hazardous disasters if it is misused. In my opinion, even though nuclear
technology
has brought plenty of
advantages but
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advantages, but
cons of its usage holds more
weightage
. On the one hand,
invention
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the invention
of nuclear
technology
has blessed mankind by providing affordable energy.
Consequently
, it helps to meet their power demand and foster the development of economy.
Additionally
, development of nuclear weapons has created threat between
first
world
countries from each other and forcing them to resolve their conflicts by debate.
As a result
, there is little of no worry about arising situations like
world war
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a world war
world wars
.
Hence
, it is palpable that nuclear energy has
capability
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the capability
to flourish economy and make a
world
a better place to live. On the
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
hand, It is not wise to gloss over the perilous effects of nuclear disasters. Nowadays, terrorism is increasing at
alarming rate
Suggestion
an alarming rate
alarming rates
and use of nuclear weapons by
such
anti
humanitarian
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human
activity could be fatal.
Moreover
,
such
disasters could even occur in the process of generating nuclear power and testing nuclear weapons and
effect
the conscious subjective aspect of feeling or emotion
affect
society severally leading to deformities in many generations.
For example
,
historical attack
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a historical attack
the historical attack
on Japan in
World
war II by nuclear missile had its effects for several decades.
Therefore
, nuclear
technology
has several negative repercussions on society.
Finally
,
although
development of nuclear
technology
has brought several benefits
for
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to
mankind but
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mankind, but
it
can not
can not
cannot
be accepted unless it becomes completely safe for mankind. It cannot be accepted as
beneficial
Suggestion
a beneficial technology
technology
until there are some activists around the
world
who gravitate towards its use to create terror in the
world
. In conclusion, I believe from points above that
disadvantages
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disadvantage
arising from misuse of nuclear
technology
as well as
horrendous tragedy
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a horrendous tragedy
from nuclear disaster can overshadow all possible benefits.
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