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the happy valley shopping center has changed alot between 1982 and 2012. Do you agree with that statement?

#valley #center #alot
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The given maps illustrate the
different
Suggestion
difference
differences
 of happy valley shopping
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 between 1982 and 2012 As we can seem, the biggest change is the removal of the lake and a part of trees of trees for another building In 1982, the Happy Valley Shopping Center was a large
area
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 with trees and a lake outside the shopping
area
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. Follow the path through the garden
area
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 to the entrance and the lobby
area
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,
Accept space
,
seem
perceive by sight or have the power to perceive by sight
seen
 from the lobby
area
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the the
definite article
the
 right was a fairly large row of toilets.
Next
Linking Words
 to it, was the elevator to transfer to
Linking Words
second floor
Suggestion
the second floor
 there were 4 cabins to accommodate a
lage
above average in size or number or quantity or magnitude or extent
large
 number of guests. The furniture store, electronics store and sports store were located side by side on the right of the lift and surround the entertainment
area
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.
Then
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 the food and coffee shop was arranged nearby for guests
concernince
with regard or relation to
concerning
concerns
.
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