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Some people think that children who spend a lot of time reading children's story books are wasting their time which could be better used doing other more useful activities. To what extent do you agree?

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It is believed by many people that teenagers who are spending most of their
time
 on reading
story
 books just loosing their
time
 which they can better use for some
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 Activities. In my view reading books us a good habit and to support my view I have discussed
further
.
Firstly
, it depends on the interest of the children that in which type of activity he wants to utilize his
time
. If he is having
a
Suggestion
an
 interest in reading stories than it is
also
 not a bad habit because infant can learn so many things from books as it is considered that books are a great source of knowledge.
Moreover
, children these days like to spend most of their
time
 in playing games on mobile phones so if by using or reading
story
 books someone is going to be distracted from that it is better for him. It is not like that
children
Suggestion
child
 has to spend his whole day in reading
story
 books, he can
also
 divide his
time
 so that he can
also
 do some
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 activities which are for their betterment and generate positive energy in the children.
Although
, books are helpful in enhancing vocabulary of the teenager as in books difficult words are used so by reading those words and knowing their meaning is helpful for the children. To
conclude it
Accept comma addition
conclude, it
 can be said that, reading
story
 books is not a bad
thing but
Accept comma addition
thing, but
 it should be done in
such
 a way that children can manage his
time
 for all other activities as well.
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