Traffic and housing problems in major cities could be solved by moving large companies and factories and their employees to the countryside. 🔸To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is being propounded by some that metropolitans’ traffic jams and limited housing resources can be mitigated through huge factories and
consequently
their employees’ relocation to the suburbs.
However
, I opine that repositioning process can impose extravagant costs and regulation complexities and the population distribution will not be effected necessarily.
First
of all the solution must be resource-
wise efficient
Accept comma addition
wise, efficient
,
optimum
Suggestion
optimal
and practical which the proposed one is not the case. As a matter of fact, rebuilding a company will demand significant financial resources and assets.
For instance
, finding a proper site and
installing supporting
Accept comma addition
installing, supporting
infrastructure
such
transportation system and distribution partners, are not always available and affordable options for owners of the business. As results, in a
tradeoff
Suggestion
trade off
view, the huge implied cost
make
Suggestion
makes
the whole plan financially unappealing.
Moreover
, the companies are mostly possessed by
private sector
Suggestion
the private sector
and the governmental authorizes will face serious complexities in implementing a legislation to encourage or even force them to commence the relocation process.
Second
of all, distance from
work-place
a place where work is done
workplace
does not induce enough motivation for employees to move out of the city and migrate to the suburb. In fact, individuals’ place of living is an important
parts
Suggestion
part
of their long term plans and lifestyle, especially when they are married.
Thus
, they rather to spend a few more hours on their way to work,
instead
of altering their lifestyle.
For instance
the families with children do have concerns about
education system quality
Suggestion
quality education system
that will make them
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
reluctant to move to
country side
Suggestion
the countryside
countryside
. As results, the population distribution of the city may not receive a serious impact, indeed its traffic and housing capacity. To conclude, I have found the idea of relocating companies to the countryside an expensive and
unaffordable
that you have the financial means for
affordable
option for governments and business owners,
hence
, It will not be any guarantee that population map will be
affect
Suggestion
affected
in a way that resolve metropolitans main issues.
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