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The maps illustrated
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the
 changing process
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that occurred at West Park Secondary School from 1950 till 2010 over years. We can
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state
 that the significant development has occurred at the houses side
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Additionally
, to change in both Farmland and Sport field by 2010. In 1950
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at the early stage of construction the school was relatively small area located to the east of the houses
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However
, In 1980
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the residential houses that lying
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on
 the West side of the West Park Secondary School was knocked down
this
 area was taken up to make a way for both Science block and Car Park
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Morever
in addition
Moreover
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the farm land has been removed and has turned to be Sport field
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However
 the playground stayed the same without any kind of change. In
next
 30-year from 1980 to 2010
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the sports field has been shrieked to take in the Car Park
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 The Car Park was dramatically extended forcing
play ground
an area where many people go for recreation
playground
 to become smaller
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 Meanwhile, the school main building and the science block remain still without any development
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