The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The above three pictures illustrate the alterations that have happened at West Park Secondary School over a 60-year period, since its establishment in 1950.
Overall
, the main building remained the same from 1950 to 2010
whereas
most of the other areas surrounding it witnessed dramatic changes. In 1950, the school basically
was
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consisted of a huge major construction, which has not changed since its erection, with a wide playground at the back. In 1980, some houses located on the left side of the institute were demolished to make way for
constructing
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a
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science block.
Furthermore
, there was a chance to build a car park. Meanwhile, spacious farmland situated on the southwest side of the original structure was transformed into a wide sports field. After 30 years,
due to
the remarkable increase
of
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the
students’
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numbers, there was a necessity to expand the parking lot;
therefore
, the sports space has become a part of the main parking area. Regarding
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sports, a
third
of the playground was allocated to be a football pitch.
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