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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style. What are the advantages of this trends? DO the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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The escalation of canned
food
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 is helping individuals to keep up with the momentum of the advance
life-style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
. In my opinion, I consider that the use of frozen
food
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 can bring about more benefits compared to any disadvantages it might bring. Despite the drawbacks mention below, the hydrated foods have many benefits which
helps
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help
 us to keep up with the tempo of modern life.
Firstly
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, if the person utilizes pre-cooked
foods it
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foods, it
 helps him to save valuable
time
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, which he spent in the kitchen for making
food
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 for himself, and can enjoy that
time
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 in socializing with friends and family.
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, it is cost-effective, as it is cheaper than the
food
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 of restaurants.
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, it is a healthy
food
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,
for instance
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, it contains calories, fats, saturated fats, and trans-fats, which is helpful for living a healthy life. Admittedly, there are some issues related to canned foods. One problem is that they tend to lack freshness in the foods which contain fruits and vegetables, as its production is the
time
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 taken as there are many steps involved with
this
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 kind of
food
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, which might not
good
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well
better
best
 for the person who has health issues. Another possible issue is that it contains a high number of calories, fats, saturated fats, sugar, and trans-fats, which can be a problem for the individual who is suffering from diseases like, diabetes, and high blood pressure, and can be dangerous if consumed in large quantity. In conclusion, I believe that, the benefits of using the precooked foods like, saving
time
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, money, and health far outweigh any problems it might bring.
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