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Each society has its homeless people. Some people believe that the best way to help them is to give them money. Do you agree or disagree?

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Today’s world, there are lots of people who do not have their own home. Some people believe that providing these people with
money
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 is the best
way
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 to help them.
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In
 my opinion, I do not agree with
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 totally.
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 of all, not all the homeless people are real. Some of them even consider that receiving
money
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 from others is their daily job.
Nowadays many
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Nowadays, many
 people pretend to be homeless. Even some people wear like homeless to beg
money
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. Because maybe they are too lazy to work and earn their own
money
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 so they think
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 is the easiest
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 to earn
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.
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, some of these people can even take a lot of
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 each
day which
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day, which
 is more than normal people take.
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 the other reason for those people who finding unnecessary to get jobs.
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, giving homeless people
money
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 is just a temporary solution. Because these people can waste all
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money
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 for buying or doing foolish things. There are some situations that homeless people spend their
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 that people gave them on smoking, alcohol
intead
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
 of using
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money
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 for buying food or clothes. İn my opinion, people who want to help homeless people can buy them some food, clothes, shoes or anything else that are necessary in daily life. And even they can help and encourage that homeless
people
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person
 to get their own jobs. İn conclusion, there are some people who believe in donating
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 is the best
way
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 to help them.
On the other
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hand there
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hand, there
 are some who do not think
this
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, as the best
way
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. So there are still a lot of arguments in giving homeless people
money
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. But I, personally believe that
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 is completely not the best
way
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 to help the homeless.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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