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Some people think that shops should sell food products from the local areas rather than products from other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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The perfect location for the trading of consumable goods is becoming increasingly controversial. A group of people
believe
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believes
 that produce sold in shopping outlets should originate from rural areas unlike been imported.
However
, I hold that edible products should be traded in stores where
such
 food items are cultivated. The reasons will be discussed below. One major merit of making sales of products from home market is because of its
healthy
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health
 benefits
on
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of
to
 the consumers.Movement of products within a short distance would discourage the use of preservatives made if strong chemicals
to retain
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retain
 their freshness.
Therefore
, it would be healthy for the consumption of
people
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the people
.
For example
, a research made by
World Health Organisation
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the World Health Organisation
 in May 2020 revealed that apples plucked and sold in Luxembourg during the lockdown led to a significant reduction in deaths associated with food intakes
although
 some still died of other ailments. Another advantage of trading consumables brought in from the local regions is that it is
cost
 friendly. Obviously, purchasing and selling within the same vicinity eliminates associated
cost
to
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of
 sales
such
 as custom duties, packaging
cost
, transportation
cost
 and the likes.
Therefore
, it would reduce the financial commitment of consumers on
such
 products.
For instance
, locally made rice in Kano, a northern state in Nigeria costs less in the country in comparison to imported rice. Conclusively,
although
 opinions might differ in respect of the source of where sales in shops should be from, but, I support that food products sold in stores should be from local areas as they are healthy as well as cheap.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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