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Nowadays, people move from one country to another for work. Some people think children of these families suffer because of this, while others think it is helpful for them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In these days, a lot of people are moving to a new country to look for work. It is argued by some that the children may suffer to adapt to the new environment, while others believe that
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 will be beneficial for the child’s growth. In my opinion, I believe that discovering a new
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 with their parents is a great experience,
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 might cause some stress in the beginning. One of the main benefits of moving abroad for family is the ability to learn about new culture which will broaden the children’s understanding while growing up.
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, the children will adapt much easier to learn a new language and eat a new food.
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, the children will be able to face the challenges easily when they grow up.
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, the children might face language barriers and
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 to make friends which might be stressful for a child.
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, some countries have a tough language,
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 as China as well as different eating habits.
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, the children coming from abroad might face a lot of difficulties to adapt to their way of
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.
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, the parents might not give their children the proper amount of attention since they are working for long hours in order to support their family needs.
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, the children might be isolated and depressed after spending too much time alone. In conclusion, moving abroad will have a positive impact on the long run for the children.
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, it can be hard at the beginning. In my opinion, starting a new
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 is advantageous for the child as long as he overcomes the obstacles.
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