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In a number of countries, some people think it is important to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Transportation is a crucial area of investment in any
country
 and depending on the necessities existing, government must decide the best solution for
get
Suggestion
getting
 an efficient flow around the cities whether for the distribution and
transport
 of goods or for the
transport
 of people.
Firstly
, railway lines are one of the most efficient
transport
method
Suggestion
methods
 nowadays, moving enormous amounts of
ware
the waging of armed conflict against an enemy
war
 in less time and with lower costs.
On the other hand
, train lines would help improving public
transport
 in some countries where today they use other methods
such
 as bus to travel between cities.
For instance
, in Colombia many people can not afford
travelling
Suggestion
to travel
 by plane so they take a bus to go to other cities and the trip could take over 14 hours. An important advantage of the construction of railway lines is that mobility in the
country
 will improve over 90%.
Secondly
, the investment in railways line around a
country
 would be really expensive and it would take lot of time to finish the project so that, invest on the existing public
transport
 give a quick and effective solution in the improvement of roads, construction of new roads and bridges between cities
in addition
, the acquisition of new and modern automotive fleet and machinery that makes the trips more confortable and
also
 to make the ware distribution process easiest and fastest. It is important to take into account that
this
 decision depends on the recent situation of the
country
 and the state of its methods of
transport
. In my opinion, the construction of new train lines is an expensive and long-term
investment but
Accept comma addition
investment, but
 it will bring better benefits in the
transport
 of ware or people in a
country
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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