The charts show survey results concerning why MBA graduates did their degree and employers’ reasons for hiring them

The charts show survey results concerning why MBA graduates did their degree and employers’ reasons for hiring them
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The charts illustrate the result of a survey about the reasons why graduate students did an MBA and what values employees should have most.
Overall
, 65% of graduates take the course for a better occupation opportunity,
while
only 10% of the
employers
agree the value of qualifications is required. As can be seen from the graph
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most students’ purpose of doing an MBA was to get more opportunities for a job at over three-fifth of the total percentage. Followed by the proportion of graduates whose reasons are the ability to do the job better and personal enhancement at 15% and 12%, respectively. As regards
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the lowest, there is only 8% of the student who did the MBA for gaining the ability to help others. With respect to the things that
employers
value most,
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of the
employers
consider that personality should be the major importance
while
the same amount of
employers
indicate that the main priority is personal previous knowledge at 25%. These are followed by the proportion of
employers
who recognize presentation as the number one priority at 20%.
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, 20% of the manager agree that employees should have previous experience
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connections and teamwork. Regarding the percentage of boss who finds qualifications as a preference, it accounts for 10%
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the lowest choice.
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