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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
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The pie chart elucidates the changes in annual expenditure by a particular United Kingdom from 1981 to 2001.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 in three schools spending on teachers'
salaries
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were
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 one of the biggest proportion compared to other expenditure. Looking at the details, expenditure on insurance in three schools from 1981 to 2001 ranged from 2%, 3%,
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and 8
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%, respectively. Another striking feature is the teachers’
salaries
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 proportion was 40% in 1981.
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, the ratio of
salaries
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 increased and made up 50 % in 1991 but the
percentage
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 again decreased and made up 45 %.
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, With regard to spending
furniture
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on furniture
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 and equipment and resources
of
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for
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 books, the
percentage
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 in 1981 was the same (15%). What about the expense of the other 2 pie charts between 1991 and 2001 the ratio was 20%,
5%respectively
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5 %respectively
.
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, in 2001 the expense in school was above compared to 1991 and made up
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a totally
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totally
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total
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 (32%) in both parts. Another striking feature is other workers'
salaries
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 in school the
percentage
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 between 1981 to 1991 was a big ratio, but in 2001 the
percentage
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 decreased and made up 15 %.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "nevertheless".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • educational expenditure
  • financial management
  • infrastructure investment
  • evolution of costs
  • annual spending
  • strategic funding
  • capital outlay
  • operational costs
  • resource allocation
  • fiscal trends
  • cost analysis
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