The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
The pie chart elucidates the changes in annual expenditure by a particular United Kingdom from 1981 to 2001.
Overall
,
it is clear that
in three schools spending on teachers'
salaries
were
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one of the biggest proportion compared to other expenditure. Looking at the details, expenditure on insurance in three schools from 1981 to 2001 ranged from 2%, 3%,
8
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%, respectively. Another striking feature is the teachers’
salaries
proportion was 40% in 1981.
However
, the ratio of
salaries
increased and made up 50 % in 1991 but the
percentage
again decreased and made up 45 %.
Nevertheless
, With regard to spending
furniture
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on furniture
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and equipment and resources
of
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for
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books, the
percentage
in 1981 was the same (15%). What about the expense of the other 2 pie charts between 1991 and 2001 the ratio was 20%,
5%respectively
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5 %respectively
.
Nevertheless
, in 2001 the expense in school was above compared to 1991 and made up
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totally
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(32%) in both parts. Another striking feature is other workers'
salaries
in school the
percentage
between 1981 to 1991 was a big ratio, but in 2001 the
percentage
decreased and made up 15 %.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • educational expenditure
  • financial management
  • infrastructure investment
  • evolution of costs
  • annual spending
  • strategic funding
  • capital outlay
  • operational costs
  • resource allocation
  • fiscal trends
  • cost analysis
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