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More and more young people use the Internet to socialize. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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With the advancement of technology, it is much common that teenagers used
internet
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the internet
 as a pathway to socialize nowadays. The sign of
this
 has been increasing tremendously as many of them used the social media to learn new friends. As a teenager, I personally think that by using
this
 way to socialize has brought many negative
effect
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effects
 that outweighed the benefit. In the endless
posibilities
a future prospect or potential
possibilities
possibility
 of
internet
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the internet
, we could meet up all
kind
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kinds
 of people from different country, races and all ages.
Although
 it might broaden your eye sight and
also
 learn new things from it, meanwhile it could
also
 bring negative influence on you. As a young people, many of them haven't
mature
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matured
 enough to filter out which content is suitable to them. Teenagers are still vulnerable and can be easily
influence
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influenced
 by undesirable people,
therefore
 it may lead them to learn bad things that are both illegal and unethical. Futhermore, since more of the young people has used
internet
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the internet
 to learn new friend and communicate with each other. It
may resulted
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may result
 in they have difficulties
on
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in
of
with
 daily communication with other people in physically. While using online
messege
a communication (usually brief) that is written or spoken or signaled
message
messages
, there are
variety
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a variety
 of short form vocabulary being used, which most of them doesn't even know what is the original word and
also
 the meaning. Beside
this
, many of them are only good at typing chat, but they are not able to have a proper conversation
with others in face
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with others face
 to face. They may face problem
such
 as
pronoucation
the manner in which someone utters a word
pronunciation
,
Accept space
,
 shy
on
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about
 speaking and having a proper eye contact. In conclusion,
although
 many teenagers today are
prefer
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preferring
 to use
internet
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the internet
 to socialize, it will lead to negative development at the same time. It is necessary to balance both physical and virtual communication with others.
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