More and more workers work overtime and did less exercise. What is your opinion?

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be cognizant or aware of a fact or a specific piece of information; possess knowledge or information about
know
it is very tough to
ouve
in the world where everyone are going towards a money fame and luxurious
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
.
but
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But
they should start and thinking about a happy
life
as well. Because After
all u
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all, you
all you
can get
money but
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money, but
your health and your
life
is
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the
most important
thing compare to
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thing to compare
anything.
if
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If
you live
happy
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happily
only
then
you cam enjoy your
moneyand
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money and
wealthy
life
style
otherwise
everything which you have is nothing.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
we can understand that as an elder man and main working man of the family you have to work
hard
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harder
and more to Survive his family in
this
digital growing world.
but
Suggestion
But
if your health is good so you can work to
longer
remain present although waning or gradually dying
linger
instead
of die at
short age
the property of being an amount by which something is less than expected or required
shortage
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
do your work happily without taking too much burden.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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