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Eating too much sugar is harmful for health. Some people think that it is government responsibility to limit people’s sugar consumption, while others think that it is individuals responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#sugar #health #people #government #responsibility #limit #people’s #consumption #individuals #amount
In all, there are about fifteen steps, from the author's idea to the book's publication. The
first
 step is to get an idea, the writer thinks about a new idea, writes his
first
 writing on a draft and after that the process of preparation, the writer
also
 corrects by editing his writing to beautify his
novel
. Once ready the writer will submit the results of his writing to the agency. The author of the
novel
 will be asked to sign a contract with the agency and afterwards the Agency will send a copy of the
novel
 to the publishing house.The editor made an offer for the
novel
 and discussed all the various negotiations
such
 as issues in the contract, strange design, changes in the contents of the different and others. After all parties have agreed, the final draft will be drafted and copied. Until the final stage, the publishing house will develop a strategy in marketing, contacting the bookseller.
Then
 the
novel
 is published and sold
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Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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