Many people think that modern day parents are more over-protective than parents from the past. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words.

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Many believe that parents earlier were not that over-protective about their children than parents

nowdays

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now a days

now days

. From my perspective, I completely agree with their opinion, and will now give my reasons below.

First

of all, we know that we are living in a dynamic world which is constantly changing, with

rapid increase

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a rapid increase

the rapid increase

in the crime

rates

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rates, such

such

as- murder, theft, blackmail, rape, kidnapping, etc. It makes sense why the parents

nowdays

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now days

are more concerned and protective about their

childs

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child's

children

whereabouts.

Also

, knowing that the law has become

more strict

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stricter

and harsh, no parent would like their child to get in any sort of trouble. Whereas, earlier the crime rates were way low and the laws were not that strict, is the main reason why parents earlier were not that protective.

Nowdays

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Nowadays

, social media is really trending and everyone is very internet

savy

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savvy

, but we forget that

alot

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a lot

of crimes are being

commited

bound or obligated, as under a pledge to a particular cause, action, or attitude

committed

on the internet from online banking theft to hacking softwares. From my real life experience, I would share an incident which

occured

come to pass

occurred

with

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me. I had recently got my bank account set up and

few days

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a few days

later received a fake mail from a similar bank site, but

ofcourse

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of course

I did not know that, so I started filling up the information it asked, and all of a sudden my father called me to check up on me, and I told him what I was doing. He told me to immediately stop filling it and show him the site. After seeing it, he told me that it was a fake site and that I could have become a victim of online banking fraud.

Therefore

, by my personal experience I would conclude by saying that it makes complete sense why parents

nowdays

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now days

are more protective about their children.

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