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In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move around. They often live in several different places in their lifetime. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant information from your own knowledge experience.

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In the past, it was common for people to bear, grow up and die in the same community. But nowadays, the lifestyle of modern people is living in several different locations. Both benefits and detriments of both will be discussed. In my view, there were three advantages when they spent all their
life
 in the same area.
Firstly
, living in one location brings some benefits like knowing the environment well, keeping in touch with the neighbours and family.
Secondly
, they knew all their neighbours.
As a result
, they completely trusted them. Imagine that they could go out without locking the door.
Besides
 some benefits, there were disadvantages of stayed in the same residence for
life
.
First
, they did not have a lot of opportunities for the jobs or education.
Also
, they could not get a high - quality education or many jobs with an attractive salary.
Next
, their knowledge limited because they didn't have the chances to gain the new things. It was good for people who lived in several different places.
Firstly
, they got more knowledge and experiences.
Secondly
, they had more opportunities in their work.
For example
, many people choose to emigrate to the city to earn more money. It was excellent for the future.
For instance
, they had the chances to work
in
Suggestion
with
 the big companies and had an attractive salary.
In contrast
, when they spent their
life
 in various areas, they had to adapt in a new habitat and a new culture. Another advantage was they couldn't keep in touch with their parents and it was too hard for them when their parents were sick. To sum up, it was evident that living in same or different places had both positive and negative effects. They could live in a position or many places all
life
Suggestion
live
 as long as they felt comfortable about the venue that they lived.
Submitted by Minh Châu Nguyễn Thị on

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