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More and more companies are allowing employees to work at home. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In recent years, the advent of technology has changed the way people do their jobs. While some people oppose the culture of working from home, I believe that
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 is beneficial for both, the employee and the employer.
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 with, the home-based working environment has a great impact on saving costs and
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 for travelling.
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 is because the huge strain on transport is because of workers as we see in local trains, buses, and private cars on the roads which often creates a bottleneck, especially in metropolitan cities
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 as Karachi or Jakarta.
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, if employees are not required to travel to their workplace, there will be a reduction in their carbon footprint, which is
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 helpful in crackdown global warming issues. Another response in
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 regard is that the employers would save a huge cost on maintaining workplace sites
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 as the air-conditioning bills or rent which seems to be a major expense in managing
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 facilities.
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, the individual will have more
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 to spend with their families leading to a stronger bond among family members. The work/life balance of individuals will hopefully be improved because their leisure-
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 is more fulfilling.
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, working parents can monitor their children 24/7 and there will be no need to rely on maids or baby-sitters, and eventually lower the chances that children will go astray.
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, the
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-saving feature will be more beneficial for those living in the countryside or the suburbs of the city, as their wastage of
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 on travelling would be minimal, possibly allowing them to utilize their
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 for career enhancement. In conclusion,
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 it seems challenging to change our working lifestyle, we must consider the benefits of home-based working, which is not only beneficial for the population as
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 will prevent us from leading environmental changes.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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