Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports star) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

I feel entertainers are getting high payment and
also
they are
most popular person
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the most popular person
.In
this
film industry men's are getting more money than female.
This
fans
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fan
associaton
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Associaton
associating
and film history make
then
objective case of they
them
highly
paied
marked by the reception of pay
paid
. I feel in
this
situation nurses
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situation, nurses
should get
high
Suggestion
higher
pay
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
they are risking their life and they are taking care of others.Doctors are getting high
salary but
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salary, but
nurses are getting only
small
Suggestion
a small
about of money.I know so many nurses who all are staying away from their family and serving the society.Doctors are checking patient and updating details on
there
of them or themselves
their
system but
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system, but
nurse are doing more than doctors and
also
they are providing after services like follow up and all. Film actors are just doing whatever things directors are
telling
a word or phrase that particular people use in particular situations
saying
to
them but
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them, but
when a patient is going to the hospital nurses are the one who is taking care of the patient after that only doctor is doing
consultation
Suggestion
a consultation
.Nurses are the angles in our society so they should be highly paid.
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