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Economic growth is the only way to end world poverty. However, some people says it leads to environment damage and should be stopped. To what extent do you agree?

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Development in relation to Nationhood is very crucial to any Country. The rate at which positive growth is being achieved has affected the livelihood of many citizens in any given
Nation
. I am of the view that development is a bedrock on which all other sectors of the
nation
 requires for a sustainable advancement and has a result of
this
, there are no relationship between it and climatic degeneration. The poor state of a country can only be controlled if there are positive movements in the areas of education, transportation, electricity, social amenities and infrastructures.
For example
, education is an important tool required in
Nation
 building. It not only equips the population with the required knowledge needed in self sustenance but it
also
 contributes to the development of all other aspects of positive changes while
on the other hand
, it educates every stakeholder on the dangers of climate changes.
Furthermore
, the achievements gained in the rapid emancipation of a country outweighs the climatic and environmental factors that pose as a treat in any given
Nation
.
For instance
, the newly completed factory on a Lagos street which produces more than half a million shoes
that is
 needed by children of school going age is termed as a positive development.
This
 will ensure that there are less importation of materials at the local factory concentrates more on the use of local materials and at the same time, job opportunities are created for the locals of the town.
Although
, the pollution that comes from the factory has been adequately managed so as not to pose as a threat to human health. Conclusively, If a
Nation
 is to change for the betterment of its citizenry and alleviate the problems faced by its citizenry, it should embrace the adequate usage of both human and material resources effectively and efficiently.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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