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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing skill is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#university #education #job #hand #people #skill
Nowadays
,
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,
there is an ongoing debate whether by completing higher education at the
university
 or working
in the
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directly in the industry
industry
 directly will lead someone to be employed in
good job
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good jobs
a good job
.
However
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However, this
this
 is a controversial topic
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think
university
 education will alleviate opportunity to get involved in the labour market. There is a stiff competition in the job market so there is a need of qualified workers.
University
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The university
 will develop the quality of students by improving specialization and by expanding variety of courses.
For instance
,
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,
business
 studies have been divided field of
business
 in various majors
such
 as public health
business
 in which participants can focus on hospital management system
,
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,
social
business
 allows to open
business
 with
small amount
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a small amount
 of money etc. Turning to the other side of the argument
,
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,
many people suggested that
work
industry
 is better to join rather than
university
.Being an employee means more responsibility and job deadlines
,
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,
pressure to complete goals and achieve targets.Universities facing the difficulties to maintain the
curriculam
an integrated course of academic studies
curriculum
 to prepare students with
work
 experience.
For
example many
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example, many
 educational institutes included co-op
work
 subjects so that students can
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
 in companies and can develop them with
industry
 environment. To
sumup
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sum up
, from my opinion
university
 education is must in today's world to develop the standards of qualified students so that they can gain
expertise but
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expertise, but
 there should be some
industry
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industrial
work
 involved so that they can be familiar with
working conditions
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the working conditions
.
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