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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing skill is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#university #education #job #hand #people #skill
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Nowadays
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there is an ongoing debate whether by completing higher education at the
university
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 or working
in the
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directly in the industry
industry
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 directly will lead someone to be employed in
good job
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good jobs
a good job
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However
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However, this
this
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 is a controversial topic
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think
university
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 education will alleviate opportunity to get involved in the labour market. There is a stiff competition in the job market so there is a need of qualified workers.
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University
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The university
 will develop the quality of students by improving specialization and by expanding variety of courses.
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,
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,
business
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 studies have been divided field of
business
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 in various majors
such
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 as public health
business
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 in which participants can focus on hospital management system
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,
social
business
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 allows to open
business
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 with
small amount
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a small amount
 of money etc. Turning to the other side of the argument
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many people suggested that
work
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industry
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 is better to join rather than
university
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.Being an employee means more responsibility and job deadlines
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pressure to complete goals and achieve targets.Universities facing the difficulties to maintain the
curriculam
an integrated course of academic studies
curriculum
 to prepare students with
work
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 experience.
For
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example many
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example, many
 educational institutes included co-op
work
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 subjects so that students can
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
 in companies and can develop them with
industry
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 environment. To
sumup
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sum up
, from my opinion
university
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 education is must in today's world to develop the standards of qualified students so that they can gain
expertise but
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expertise, but
 there should be some
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industry
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industrial
work
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 involved so that they can be familiar with
working conditions
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the working conditions
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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