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task 2: Nowadays, more and more women decide to have children later in their life? why? Does the advantage or disadvantage?

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It is true that having children later is a trend which many modern women pursue nowadays.There are many reasons for
this
, and the advantage of
tendency
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the tendency
 overwhelms the drawbacks
.
Accept space
.
 That
women
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woman
decide
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decides
 to have children originates from the change in their conception.
firstly
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Firstly
, women join more and more social activities to contribute to different important fields.
this
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This
 makes women to want to achieve high status or having a career in stable finance before getting married and giving birth.
Secondly
, pressure at work makes women to get trouble in balancing between job and personal life.
therefore
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Therefore
, if they have babies soon, they have to face lots of difficulties in looking after their children.
finally
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Finally
, because the medical system becomes more modern, they think that late pregnancy is absolutely possible. It seems to me that it is better for women to have children later in their life. I believe that it is time when they achieve success in the modern business world, so they are
skillful
 and spend quality time for their children as well as family.
Besides
, because accomplishing women don’t experience regular cash flow problems, so they have enough finance to raise their offspring. Their children will have the best condition to develop.
for
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For
 example, these children are educated in foreign environments, take part in talent classes like playing instruments, painting, dancing,... In conclusion, the reasons that make women to decide to have children later comes from different factors.
however
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However
,
this
 situation is better for both women and children.
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