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Some people think that the museum should be enjoyable places to entertain people while others believe that that purpose of a museum is to educate. Discuss both views and opinion.

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According to some people
museum
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 are a
place
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 to enjoy as, after a long and tiring week they want some
fun
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 activity. People today are more in search of leisure and want a
place
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 to enjoy in, museums the can have both
learing and
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fun and learning so
learning and fun so
fun
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 so they expect it to have some enjoyable environment in their. Museums can be a good
palce
a point located with respect to surface features of some region
place
piece
 to learn as some people want an enjoyable environment to learn. They want
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museum
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the museum
 to be an enjoyable
place
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 so as to enjoy and chill. Whereas the other half of the people think that
museum
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 are solely based
for
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in
 learning and educating people, they think that museums have been built to give us information about some past events and people.
while
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While
 many people still debate that museums should not be taken as
fun
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place
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. I personally feel that people should not take
museum
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 as a
place
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 to enjoy as they are built to give us information on the past event and people. Museums are a
place
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 made to learn and having
fun
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their
in or at that place
there
 can be a problem
to
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for
with
 people that come there to study and gain knowledge.
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