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For centuries, important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing, and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as a fourth skill to be added to the list. To what extent do you agree?

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TODAY'S WORLD IS FAST-PACED AND TO COPE WITH THE ONGOING ENHANCEMENTS EVERYONE SHOULD KNOW THE BASIC SKILL OF THE
COMPUTER
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 AS MATHS, READING, AND WRITING.
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 ESSAY WOULD 100% CONCUR WITH THE ABOVE NOTION BECAUSE OF THE MANDATORY REQUIREMENTS OF THE
COMPUTER
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 AT THE PRESENT.
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,
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 ESSAY WILL DISCUSS WHY IT HAS ADDED TO THE LIST AS AN IMPORTANT PART OF THE STUDY.
SECONDLY
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, HOW
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 IS AFFECTING A MANUAL WORKFORCE. I THINKS IT SHOULD GIVEN THE IMPORTANCE FROM AN EDUCATION SIDE BUT LEARNER SHOULD KNOW HOW TO WORK MANUAL AS WELL. ON THE ONE HAND, THE
COMPUTER
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 SKILL HAS MADE COMPULSORY BECAUSE OF THE ONE MAJOR REASON AND IS THE REVOLUTION IN THE GADGET FIELD THAT HAS MADE AN EFFORTLESS LIFE FOR THE HUMAN. OWNING TO
COMPUTER
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 DIMINISHES THE TIME REQUIRED FOR THE CHORE TO COMPLETE.
CONSEQUENTLY
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,
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 ALLOWS A PERSON TO FOCUS ON OTHER TASKS
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 ESSENTIAL TO BE COMPLETED ON TIME.
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, ACCORDING TO THE UK INFORMATION TECHNOLOGY DEPARTMENT, 70% OF THE MANUAL WORK IS NOW COMPLETED WITH THE HELP OF THE
COMPUTER
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SUCH
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 AS ACCOUNTING PARTS.
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,
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 NEWLY ADDED SKILL HAS REDUCED THE MANUAL WORK AND A MYRIAD OF FOLKS ARE BEING UNEMPLOYED.
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 IS RESULTING IN A RECESSION IN THE TECHNICAL FIELD AND BECAUSE OF
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 A PLETHORA OF INDIVIDUAL ATTEMPTING A MISCONDUCTS TO FEED THEIR FAMILY.
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, AS PER THE USA GENERAL CIVILIAN DEPARTMENT SURVEY OF THE
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 YEAR, 70% OF THE EDUCATED PEOPLE ARE REPORTED A CRIME IN THE
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 TWO YEAR BECAUSE OF THE UNEMPLOYMENT. IN CONCLUSION, THE
COMPUTER
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 SKILLS INDEED FEED THE PERSON WHO HAVE THE BASIC KNOWLEDGE OF IT.
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, IT WOULD HAVE DETRIMENTAL IMPACT ON THE SOCIETY IF NOT BE BALANCED
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