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Some people think that the government should take care of disadvantaged people such as unemployed and homeless people. Do you agree or disagree?

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Whether or not the
government
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 should take care of the
unprivileged
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 is a matter of grave concern. I am in total
favor
promote over another
favour
 of
government
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 lending a helping hand to
this
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 sector of our society
since
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from
 the
government
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 can work on a larger scale and make a difference in their lives. In the
next
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 few paragraphs, I will be justifying my view point. Since majority of homeless people
consists
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consist
 of young manpower,
government
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 can take steps to educate and employ them so that they can make a difference to the society and not get involved in illegal activities.
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, a lot unemployed and homeless people we see do drugs are some of them steal to make a living. But if
government
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 provides support to them, they can look forward to a bright future. It would
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 be a great nudge to their upcoming generation since they won’t have to go through the same trauma as
them
people in general
they
. Talking about the unemployed, there are many people who are quite talented and still waiting for their big break. Most of them are deprived of the opportunities that may have come to them easily if they were privileged as the rest.
Government
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 can take measures to introduce various
skill
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skills
 based programs to provide them a platform where they can showcase their talents and earn a decent wage. To sum it up, I would like to stress on the importance of
government
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 putting a step forward to help the
unprivileged
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 section of the society and
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 making a difference in their lives.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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